Hello I’m a Light Novel author and I write a novel with M1 abrams that transported into another world. I don’t have first hand experience with that tank but I do some little research and I hope it is accurate enough lol. So if you’re interested reading my book I will provide a link for that. I need your insight on how can I improve it and even if its so highly fictional, I will make it realistic as possible. https://www.webnovel.com/book/transported-into-another-world-with-my-m1-abrams-tank_28467738900865205[M1 ABRAMS ISEKAI WN LINK]
You’re having a chatbot write it?
An M1 would be operational for a matter of hours or days before it ran out of fuel or broke-down. Do you have a magical endless supply of fuel, parts, and mechanics for it in your story?
Yep, that would be the challenges that need to overcome by the mc later on. Maybe I will put some magical things on it but still make it technical.
And I don’t have a chat bot
Yeah i don’t know about this one chief
It may be translating errors but this whole thing kinda screams Ai
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Be funny if there was a series where a Mage in another world had a summon ability that didn’t bring forth fantasy creatures, but rather semi-sentient military vehicles with magical supplies to do her bidding.
Kinda like this meme.
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This is both very funny and very impressive. Well done!
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Yeah I definitely see what you and Exocetta mean by AI having written it, there are mistakes in the text that a fluent writer of english wouldn’t make, but I don’t think it’s so bad to accuse them of using AI to write it LOL. It ain’t that bad.
Anyway I gave chapter 1 and 2 a quick read and I think it would be a good idea to go over the first few chapters you wrote again after some more experience writing,
I mean for one I literally have no idea how this tank is supposed to look besides a red gun barrel. I mean in this sentence: “It’s fully crimson gun barrel, turret and hull painted on black, green and red dazzled slashed with black stripes”
So first it starts, "fully crimson gun barrel, so the gun barrel is completely red, next comma; “turret and hull painted on black” and now we’re completely off the rails, are the turret and hull painted black, or RED ON black (whatever the fuck that means), again next comma; “green and red dazzled slashed with black stripes” so the turret and hull are painted RED ON black, AND also green and red “dazzled slashed with black stripes”
Yeah sorry even with 21 years of reading, writing and speaking english I cannot figure out what you mean by any of this, clearly it’s supposed to have stripes but what colour are the stripes, what’s the actual colour of the hull; etc.
A far far preferable way of describing the colour of the tank would be: "It’s turret; including barrel, are completely red; It’s hull painted black with green and red stripes alternating across it('s hull).
Anyway good Luck OP, I’m curious to see how this goes